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Fic post from my archive.

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Ryouma encounters someone who jars his view of what tennis is, and has a few revelations in the aftermath, some less comfortable than others. Drama With Almost Romance, I-4

Momo remembered going from being a bit worried about Akutsu's dismissive contempt to being a little alarmed at his absolute, devouring, manic focus on Ryouma, once the game heated up. At no point had Momo really been surprised, though. Even then, he'd taken it pretty much for granted that Echizen could hold any fire barehanded, on the court.

Date: 2004-08-14 05:25 pm (UTC)
ext_1114: (fangirlish)
From: [identity profile] written-in-blue.livejournal.com
!!!!!!!

Momo! Gah! [pouncecuddles Momo] Gah!

Is there, by any chance, going to be a fic where we get to see Ryouma working through whatever thought he had that wouldn't let him go home, where Nanjirou is? [hope, hope]

Date: 2004-08-15 12:46 am (UTC)
ext_1114: (grin)
From: [identity profile] written-in-blue.livejournal.com
[Snoopy dances for joy]

Date: 2004-08-14 09:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aishuu.livejournal.com
I think the one thing that immediately struck me as "off" is that Matsueda would be a rehash of Akustu - that was the whole point of the Akutsu arc, really, about how someone could be naturally gifted in tennis and not like it. Akutsu and Matsueda both are "tennis bullies" and I don't really see the distinction.

I did enjoy your view of Fuji being one of the "crazies" and Ryomas fears for what "could have been" but... I think I need more variation between Matsueda and Akutsu.

Date: 2004-08-15 05:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aishuu.livejournal.com
A difference of opinion is fine - I'm not saying I didn't enjoy this (I enjoy everything you write, because you write WELL), I just found the character too like Akutsu. *shrugs* Maybe I needed an explainer graph with Akutsu specifically explained.

I think this character just struck me as Akutsu, rewind.

<--- unable to explain it better, sorry....

^^;;

Date: 2004-08-15 07:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aishuu.livejournal.com
Momo is supposed to be QUITE the analyst, so that would work. *relieved she didn't offend*

I think that would flesh out Matsueda more.

Date: 2004-08-15 07:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aishuu.livejournal.com
A difference of opinion is fine - I'm not saying I didn't enjoy this (I enjoy everything you write, because you write WELL), I just found the character too like Akutsu. *shrugs* Maybe I needed an explainer graph with Akutsu specifically explained.

I think this character just struck me as Akutsu, rewind.

<--- unable to explain it better, sorry....

^^;;

Date: 2004-08-14 09:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] featherypony.livejournal.com
This story is making me squee. Well actually only this chapter has made me squee, but I've really enjoyed reading the rest of it too. ^^ And I look forward to more!

Date: 2004-08-15 05:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] readx0r.livejournal.com
Mmm... ^__^ God, that was good. There are at least three or four levels of subtext to that conversation about genuinely bad tennis players, and I LOVE stuff like that. *squeals happily* However, you may just seduce me into actually liking Momoshirou. Momo is the only, and I mean, literally, the ONLY character besides Nanjirou I've seen so far in the series and on fansites that I've actually put any effort into actively disliking, and now you're making me like him. XD While you keel us with UST. *dies* It's getting to the point where I'm checking both your journals about three times a day, just to see if you updated. ;.;

And also, *hugs Ryouma*. GodDAMN that boy needs it with a father like that. *pulls face*

Date: 2004-08-15 06:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] flamesword.livejournal.com
oh, squee! or gahbibble, as Trix would say... ^__^ *drowns in the warm fuzzies* Whoa, that was a mixed metaphor... XD Schweet, I love it! <3 more more more more MORE!! please. XD

Date: 2004-08-15 07:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lady-readwolf.livejournal.com
ya know... the problem with getting to these fics after other people is that most of the things you were thinking to say have already been adequately said by other people, gosh darn it!

Still, I agree with your take on Jin. In the anime it is definitely shown that Jin *is* attracked to tennis, but he's just one of those rebellious teenagers who needs a good kick in the ass! It's not that he doesn't care about tennis---I mean, look at how he 'chases' after Ryoma when Ryoma's playing for shit after losing to Sanada that first 'unofficial' match of theirs. And then when Keven shows up, you see it again... how he almost tries to "defend" his team? {grins{

Anyway, speaking of kitty kats in laps, *my* cat has decided that after being gone for nine days it's time I got off the computer and started giving him more loving, so if you'll excuse me...

Look froward to reading more soon!

~AR

Date: 2004-08-16 03:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lady-readwolf.livejournal.com
{purrs} That's my baby. I should get more pics of him to put up--it's just such a doll. ^____^

Having watched the episode tonight where Jin "helps" Ryoma out of his funk after having lost so horrendously to Sanada, I have to definitely agree with you--Jin has a bad rep. but it's one he's worked long and hard at building.

With this topic fresh in mind, I was talking about it to Marika, and... it's just plain and easy to see that the kid really does like tennis; he's just too stubborn... and I think that's part of the reason his coach *does* push him so much, because he *can* see how much Jin cares about tennis. Probably more than anything else... he actually gives a flying fig tree about tennis.

But... Well, you look at him, and you see where he's coming from, at least a little bit. There's no father figure what-so-ever ever mentioned. Doing the math lets you know his mom was still in her teens when he was born (wasn't she only 30? if he's 14...) You know his childhood couldn't have been easy, and you see in the flashbacks how angry he was, going from one place to another looking for a fight, looking for a challenge... looking for something or someone he could look up to, something that was better than himself...

And, well, I think it's a pretty safe bet to say that Takashi was probably easily Jin's first (maybe only?) friend. At least until Junior High School, 'cause somehow, I get the impression Sengoku wouldn't mind being 'friends', and Dan definitely has a torch still burning for the psycho. ^___^

I don't know if Tezuka would be able to do for him what Ryoma did, though...

Date: 2004-08-16 05:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] furuba-forever.livejournal.com
Yay! I finished reading all of your PoT fics in one go and have desided to comment! Lol

First of all, you do great Rikkai D1 fics, and Rikkaidai fics in general. Good job, *loves your Rikkai*.

I totally didn't expect the TezukaOishi though, ^^;; sorry. But it was fine.

I was wondering if you'll ever go back to writing fics for FMA. I first found out about you from your FMA fics because I loved the dynamics that you managed to express with Roy Ed and Hughes. I hope that you'd write more for that fandom int he future. ^_^

With that said, I really enjoy your writing. ^^b

Date: 2004-08-20 06:12 am (UTC)
ext_9905: (Default)
From: [identity profile] soloproject.livejournal.com
OMG THERE IT IS!!! *beats MomoRyo with the Clue Trout(tm)*

i love you! You make me love this pair! Argghhhh *cheers* 'cause can't help it >.>

Date: 2004-08-21 01:00 am (UTC)
ext_9905: (Default)
From: [identity profile] soloproject.livejournal.com
DAAAAARN! This is a CONSPIRACY! >OOO!!!

I'm weak. *__*

Date: 2008-02-07 04:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hedgehogdi1emma.livejournal.com
Holy crap. I don't believe that I've never read your stuff before. In fact, I'm not quite sure how I stumbled upon your page. Your MomoRyo is FANTASTIC. And the last lines? Pure, unadulterated admiration and love. (Yes, I realize you wrote this years ago so I bet you're EVEN MORE AMAZING NOW.)

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