PoT: Mirror Writing: Twist

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Twist

Ryouma encounters someone who jars his view of what tennis is, and has a few revelations in the aftermath, some less comfortable than others. Drama With Almost Romance, I-4

Momo remembered going from being a bit worried about Akutsu's dismissive contempt to being a little alarmed at his absolute, devouring, manic focus on Ryouma, once the game heated up. At no point had Momo really been surprised, though. Even then, he'd taken it pretty much for granted that Echizen could hold any fire barehanded, on the court.

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[branchandroot]

*nods, thoughtfully* An explainer graph I could probably do. Akutsu would make a reasonable point of comparison from Momo's viewpoint. Any clarification I can give without descending into exposition is a good thing. And contrasting Matsueda to Akutsu, a bit, could help flesh Matsueda out some more, which I do want to do. And help emphasize the development of Momo's analytical eye, which would be good too. *claps hands* Good, that'll all work! *scribbles revision notes*

[aishuu.livejournal.com]

Momo is supposed to be QUITE the analyst, so that would work. *relieved she didn't offend*

I think that would flesh out Matsueda more.