PoT: Challenge: Credit

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Credit

This story takes place in a quantum bubble of the Challengeverse (maybe it happened, maybe it didn't), immediately following "The Continuation of War". Tezuka offers Oishi some support after his very bad day. Porn with Characterization, I-3

It had not been a relaxing day for Oishi Shuichirou.

Comments

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

very few people gave Tezuka attitude for long once they had played against him. Well, very few people, aside from Echizen, who gave absolutely everybody attitude, and could actually be considered becomingly respectful, by comparison, for moderating the back talk he gave his captain.

{laughing} you know... this reminds me of what Aishuu and I were talking about with Echizen and his maturity--or lack there of--and how his attitude towards respect is very much one of a more American upbringing.

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it had been the crack about Niou's own captain that had been the last straw

This is such a telling observation about Oishi's character. Where Yukimura would have laughed it off and/or played into Niou's teasing, Oishi took offense for him... or maybe I'm reading this wrong?

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sspp... I noticed this 'cause of someone else's comment, but, the third paragraph---"Oishi's teeth were grinding"...

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mmmm... Tezuka's hands... massage.... damn, I bet that feels good....


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I don't know... maybe I'm a liar, and I really can't read most pairings... but this.. still didn't sit right with me. Not so much with it being Tezuka and Oishi, but... but with it being Tezuka. Tezuka seemed off to me. I haven't placed my finger on it yet, but when I do...

:-/ Perplexed.

[branchandroot]

but, the third paragraph---"Oishi's teeth were grinding"...

*facepalm* Oops. Thank you.

Hm. If you do pin it down, let me know. I know I do take advantage of the fact that you can ascribe just about any emotion to Tezuka in private; I may have taken it too far in this one. Maybe the implied history needs to be fleshed out more to support their interaction?

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

yeah, I figured you'd want to know about that--I honestly didn't notice it the first couple of times, I'm so used to switching back and forth in my own narratives. ^.^;;

Hmmm... good point. You're right. that's it. Tezuka just seems too... emotionally *open* all of a sudden...

{happyily} well, that solves that mystery! Now, when's the next part???