FMA epic start

[branchandroot]

Ok, here's the first chapter of the epic that bit me. Linked off site because I'm sick of messing around with code that's scrozzled on one end or the other.

Antagonism is the main warning for this chapter.

http://www.alltrees.org/hybrid/writing/FMA/ever.ch1.html

Back to ch. 2.

Comments

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[arete.livejournal.com]

Sweet! *purr* Very nice... Does Al think Taisa has a crush on Ed, or Ed a crush on Taisa? *blink* Now you've got me calling him Taisa... though I like Al's cutting across the argument like that. Al's only the stable one in comparison... Ed may be an extreme personality, but Al is too, just not as much. And I think Ed and Al know more than Taisa thinks, though they don't know it consciously... they're *both* geniuses, even if they have trouble recognizing in themselves and each other. I blame that on the fact that all they had to compare themselves is each other, and outside comparison would have shown them how extraordinary they are.

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[branchandroot]

Oh, crushes are not thought of by any of them yet. Al just knows that Mustang-Taisa is baiting his Nii-san, and doesn't like it. Al is still the polite one, but getting out of that armor seems to have done away with a lot of his diffidence.

Heh. Just wait until I promote Roy and it changes to Mustang-Junshou.

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[arete.livejournal.com]

Heh, crushes are cute. Yeah, I could see how the armor would increase his diffidence--both he and Ed are very conscious to how people react to them physically, Al had to know that he had to extremely careful with how he physically interacted with people. I love the dynamics between the brothers... one of my favorite things in the canon/fanon.

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[branchandroot]

Exceedingly cute. So cute that Ed just may kill me when we get to that part.

Hm. I think you'll like chapter two.

[annotated_em]

Aie.

This is twice--TWICE!--today you have made me an ecstatic Em. [purrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrs]

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[branchandroot]

*snugglenuzzlepurr*

Really, I'm just trying to keep you in the FMA mood so you start writing this stuff, too.

[moumusu.livejournal.com]

...I wonder if Al isn't just going to try to kill Roy, but finally try to get his license? Or is he still vulnerable to mean scientists wanting to take him apart? (Might make better sense if he sticks around and keeps Winry company, anyway...)

I likes it. Write us more.

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[branchandroot]

Bwahaha! Just wait for chapter two. *evil smirk*

[marmalade-girl.livejournal.com]

This is a very nice start. I'm happy to see Al back in his own body and I'm happy to see Ed at all. (Ed *always* makes this one happy!) I'm anxious for the crushes and the kissing to start, but I gather you're going to make us wait for it, huh?

BTW--I *did* make that screencap my wallpaper, and my darling husband is at his wits end over what to do with his odd wife. I suspect that when I come home from work tomorrow, it'll be changed. Thanks for helping me torment him! ^___^

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[branchandroot]

Oh, it'll be clueless ust right to the end *wicked laugh*.

Always glad to help!