PoT: Mirror Writing: Backstage - Part Three

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Backstage: Part Three

Tezuka and Atobe meet while out fishing, in the Spring of their third year of high school. Conversation, verbal jousting, poetry, philosophy, angst, dramatics and humor ensue. Drama with Budding Romance, I-3

Keigo opened his eyes. He was becoming increasingly fluent in Tezuka-speak, which was a very tonal language. That particular tone was more terse than he would have thought the comment warranted.

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[flamesword.livejournal.com]

oops...I actually read this like a week ago, and I thought I had commented already...apparently I didn't because I followed that link to Familiarity and got thoroughly sidetracked. Hee...I don't usually like future fics, I rarely see them done well, but that....that rocked. Thanks for the rec/reference/link/thing! ^_^

And this....I swear to god woman, I don't know how you do it. I do believe you just wrote IC AtoTez fluff. o.o Because for them, that is fluff. yes. oi. There are so. many. little things I just adore, about your writing in general and this in particular...the Tezuka-speak, the relative smartness of the fish (XD!), the way he narrows down the possibilities in his thoughts before making a comment...the 'center of the circus' question (how apt! XD) and I positively love the phrase, 'crack of black laughter'. *shivers* Such a vivid evocation of the sound...I know exactly what you mean, and I can so hear him laughing like that.

And the reference to Momoshiro as bouncy....lmao. XD He so is, really....or rather, Keigo would see him so. The bit about him being in a good enough mood not to make him ask out loud, was so...mmm, no words, lol, I just loved it...and this, perfect: Entertainment was one thing, but if he did press Tezuka further on this subject the return was likely to go beyond painful and into deadly.

*happy sigh* Oh, I ♥ you for so many things, in so many ways. That's just gah...the way you said it as much as what you said, I just lurve. You're one of the few people that--completely aside from the story, which is fantastic to begin with--I simply enjoy and admire the way you use the language itself, how you makes the words and images work; the way you phrase things.

Finally, that last part with Keigo speaking English and Tezuka's response, so just exactly right and eeeee! bittersweet-brown eyes! <3 ^____^ Never mind love, can I worship you? *_*

[branchandroot]

*grins* If you haven't before, you should read some Lois McMaster Bujold books; I absorbed several turns of phrase from her, and that laugh was one of them. Sometimes it surprises me when I read back through and realize how much I got from her. I think it shows most with Keigo; her style of humor fits him.

Heee, fluff! They do loosen up, once I get them away from their teams.

*happy bouncing* I'm so glad you liked it!

[flamesword.livejournal.com]

Ahh, I see...I've heard of her, of course, but never read any of her work, I don't think. I'll have to do something about that. ^_^

It was fluff. *nods* I would never have believed it, but it was fluff. ^^ You're probably right, about the only way this could happen was if they meet off the courts and away from their teams and 'official' roles. It's yummy though...mmm...