PoT: Standalone: Demonstration

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Demonstration

In honor of issue 250 of the manga. After that match Tezuka and Oishi have wild sex in the locker room. Porn Without Plot, I-4, manga continuity obviously

"Ah! Tezuka..." Shuichirou leaned his head back against the wall, panting now. "You took me slow once already today. Hurry up."

Tezuka laughed low in his throat at this interpretation of their match. "If you like. Turn around, then."

Comments

[simply-kim.livejournal.com]

hrm... I kinda liked this. XD I'm not much of a Tezuka/Oishi fan, since I LOVE AtoZuka too much... but if ever Tezuka would deviate away from Atobe, this would be more like it. XD I haven't read Genius 250 yet, sadly, but I will, once I get all the stuff I need to do done. ^_^ Anyway, I like the fact that they share some sort of connection, you were pretty accurate about that (It shows in the way you presented your fic) However, I have to say that the part where Oishi-kun said "Fuck me..." or something along those lines blew my brain off. XD I couldn't even dare thing he would say that! XD But then, it's your fic and it's your prerogative on what to do with your characters... acter all, there WERE times that Oishi had been known to switch from mother hen to being quite demanding and authoritative at the same time. So, it's possible. I can't contest to that fact. ^_^
Techie stuff-wise, i'd say you did a great job in presenting it, the grammar is good, you made clear the setting and the atmosphere as well.

Great job! ^_^

[branchandroot]

Glad you liked it.

the part where Oishi-kun said "Fuck me..." or something along those lines blew my brain off

That is, of course, the difficulty of translating a word-concept like yaru. The more "literal" translation would be do it, but that phrase, in English, can't always convey the situational intensity involved. I tend to render it differently, depending on the context. In this case, the context was fairly raw and intense, thus the cruder expression.

Oishi is a fascinating character, which is one reason I like writing from his viewpoint when he's a central character in one of my stories. His manga incarnation, in particular, is caring and conscientious without really being gentle, and he has a remarkably ruthless manipulative streak. Issue 250 showed that, and the effect it has on the team as a whole, very well. If you like the team-interaction parts of the manga, I expect you'll like that issue.

[simply-kim.livejournal.com]

Oh, I see. ^_^ Your work fascinates me, so I think I would be reading more of your pieces in the near future. ^_^

Yes, Oishi IS a rather fascinating character, as opposed to what many people say about him. I totally agree with you on that one. ^_^ And I'm really excited to read the newest chapter of the TeniPuri manga! ^_^ I'm sure I will enjoy it. ^_^