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Branch ([personal profile] branchandroot) wrote2004-12-14 07:41 pm

PoT: Standalone: Demonstration

Fic post from my archive.

Demonstration

In honor of issue 250 of the manga. After that match Tezuka and Oishi have wild sex in the locker room. Porn Without Plot, I-4, manga continuity obviously

"Ah! Tezuka..." Shuichirou leaned his head back against the wall, panting now. "You took me slow once already today. Hurry up."

Tezuka laughed low in his throat at this interpretation of their match. "If you like. Turn around, then."

[identity profile] chinawolf.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 01:19 am (UTC)(link)
Not usually my pairing, but... guh. *fans self* Very, very nice. Thank you for sharing.

[identity profile] muscatlove.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 01:20 am (UTC)(link)
<3 God, I love TezuOishi, and not many people agree with it, let alone write fantastic character-driven smut about it. ^^ Very, very good.
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[identity profile] written-in-blue.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 02:11 am (UTC)(link)
Purrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr. Soverytasty.\

I have given up trying to figure out what Konomi is up to. Whatever genre tenipuri is, straight shonen certainly isn't it.

[snickers and runs]
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[identity profile] written-in-blue.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 02:23 am (UTC)(link)
I've missed out on this Tarzan thing, apparently, but then, I've not been following the raw manga--or hadn't, until the buchou came home. ^^;

Sometimes I wonder what Konomi was thinking, and why this story couldn't have been told at the high school level...

[identity profile] hikariblue.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 04:37 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, that was hot.

[identity profile] essie07.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 09:03 am (UTC)(link)
I do believe this is the first time I've read a Tezu/Oishi pairing. You made the first read unbelievably hot and engaging!

Mmm... I hope to see more of this in the future!

[identity profile] maeran.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 09:07 am (UTC)(link)
Mrrrow. Emily-san, you know how to indulge a fangirl. Mmm, ExoticTruffle!Smut.

...

I should send you some of those truffles. And now I have a most insane craving for them.

[identity profile] mica-chan.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 07:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, Emily, I've already said I love you!?? Because I really do. I was missing a fic (not to say a really good) with Tezuka and Oishi for soooo long.
I've already told you I totally love this pair and it's a pleasure each time I see you writing with a pair I love (and you did it with them twice! You're perfect!!).
I'd liked to had read Genius 250....I miss Tezuka so much...

[identity profile] lady-mari-chan.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 08:34 pm (UTC)(link)
{Folds report she's working on into fan and begins fanning herself} Oh my!

{Realizes she just ruined her report} Oh Crap!

Ah well, it was worth it. ^_^

[identity profile] ii-hanashi.livejournal.com 2004-12-15 10:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Ooooh, preeetty. It's amazing how you manage to bring across their characters so well with so little dialogue. *coughs* The smut was hot too. I didn't entirely understand all of what was being said in Genius 250, but it seems like this story could have fit right in. If this was a different type of manga. Or if Konomi-sensei would just come out and admit that PoT is that type of manga. ^_~

[identity profile] naanima.livejournal.com 2004-12-16 02:11 am (UTC)(link)
.... ghuh... LOVE! MAD RABU!

I have this soft spot for Oishi fics not involving Kikumaru (not that I don't like Eiji it's just that Oishi by himself is so damn fascinating).

[identity profile] naanima.livejournal.com 2004-12-17 01:23 am (UTC)(link)
Oh definitely. Manga!Oishi is crafty and very underhanded, and so very much more than what the Stereotype make him to be. Sure he mothers quite a bit but let's not forget that Oishi is also the type who will manipulate and lie to get the team to perform at their best. If nothing else the newest issue proves his manipulative skills. It is more a case of manipulation for the greater (or individual) good than manipulation for selfish reasons.

I LOVE Oishi *huggles*

And yes, up against the wall.... I have this thing about sex against the wall or a desk.... *bliss*

[identity profile] cutter-tekka.livejournal.com 2004-12-16 04:10 am (UTC)(link)
Hmm, it's difficult for me to go from zero to Tezuka/Oishi smut unless I'm in a certain mood, but one thing that caught my attention:

"Tezuka. Fuck me hard. Fuck me as hard as you play me."

I found myself paying more attention from this line forward. Not that I'd been skimming before or anything, but there's always got to be this moment where the smut is doing something other than the physical, some concept or hook or idea that will keep me interested, and this was definitely it for me here. I've always thought that would have to be the really preoccupying desire for anyone truly interested in becoming Tezuka's lover: having him let go with you the same way that he lets go with tennis. Because that single-minded, intense pressure is what makes him Tezuka, and it's the thing that's sexy about him, and it's why he's truest when he's playing. So anyone who wanted him would have to want that, and it's not necessarily a given that they would get it without asking.

But if you got it, the energy he put into tennis put into you, it would blow your mind.

Ryouma in particular, I think, would need/want this if he were a Tezuka lover--I thought about that during the Yaru arc, because that Ryouma was so well-done that he could continue to live in my head and I could converse with him afterwards. So we talked about that a little, he and I. ^_^

And this has been your random Cutter-rambling for the day.

[identity profile] flamesword.livejournal.com 2004-12-26 03:16 pm (UTC)(link)
oh, my. *wibbles* See, I actually love this pairing, but I have never, never seen it written well. I've been craving good TezuOishi smut since way back around ep 49-50 or so? When Tezuka plays Ryoma right before he leaves for Germany. Because it's SO obvious right there how Oishi feels about Tezuka. *g* Agree most wholeheartedly with you and Cutter, too... that intensity is in fact what makes Tezuka so fascinating. Also why he goes well with Ryoma...which I have yet to find the time to read that arc, but I am much looking forward to it. *beams* I love you. ^_^ This fic is my proof--see, I'm not crazy! It does so work! hee... See me melt into a puddle of fangirl goo now... (like I don't usually when I read your fics, but moreso. lol)

*gooooo and meltymelty*

[identity profile] flamesword.livejournal.com 2004-12-26 03:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, I almost forgot... I didn't, and don't have time to leave proper feedback on it now, but your AS twincest, the wings one... that is sheer incandescent bliss. *nods lots* I do love them both so very much. *happy sigh of glowymeltybliss*

[identity profile] arctic-dragon.livejournal.com 2004-12-27 05:22 am (UTC)(link)
Hot Hot Hot
Hmmm...not what I was expecting at all...it was so much better.
I loved the characterisations and the fact that it came over as meaningful despite the wonderful smut.
Cheers

[identity profile] mirime.livejournal.com 2004-12-27 08:06 am (UTC)(link)
mmm so hot.. TezuOishi is such an unloved pairing. *sigh* nicely written :)

[identity profile] histoirede.livejournal.com 2004-12-27 09:14 am (UTC)(link)
You made my day ^-^ That's such a nice -and hot- fic (and the fact that I worship every piece of fic and art with Tezuka and Oishi as a couple as nothing to do with it ^^;) !
Nicely written, and a nice following to Genius 250. (Even if after crying Oishi I would have expected something more luffy...)
Again, thank you for writing it ^-^

[identity profile] histoirede.livejournal.com 2004-12-27 05:57 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, I certainly hope you'll write more on them in the future ^-^
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[personal profile] love 2004-12-27 03:45 pm (UTC)(link)
Good lord ... *shakes head* I'm sleepy so I can't think straight, but mmm, nice, I thought of so many things when I read Genius 250 and I'm so glad someone wrote some of it down. (Though I wouldn't ever have made them sex each other up ... but I've been told often my sex radar doesn't really work ...)

[identity profile] setra.livejournal.com 2004-12-27 09:46 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow! That was... mmm yeah. I love TezuOishi, and there's entirely too little of it out there at all, let alone stories this well-written.
If I may ask, where do you find the recent issues of Jump? I'm curious to see the game that led up to this. ^__^

[identity profile] gottis-chan.livejournal.com 2004-12-28 02:42 pm (UTC)(link)
*___* Lovely! This is one of my favorite pairings - after Golden Pair and Tezuryo - and wow! *_* Hot-ness! Thank you!

[identity profile] gottis-chan.livejournal.com 2004-12-30 06:11 pm (UTC)(link)
No prob! =^.^= The world needs more TezuOishi *nodnod*
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[identity profile] hakainokami.livejournal.com 2004-12-29 08:58 am (UTC)(link)
I havent actually read the story yet. Because i'm so happy that you wrote a) another Tezuka Oishi story, and b0 that it was from 250. I felt the need to say how great that was. because there is very little Tezuka Oishi, even less good Tezuka Oishi, and a lot of its in french, which I can't read very well.

[identity profile] ecchipiro.livejournal.com 2005-01-05 02:15 am (UTC)(link)
Where are those french fics?! I'm not very fluent in french either but better than nothing. *.*
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[identity profile] hakainokami.livejournal.com 2005-01-05 05:27 am (UTC)(link)
http://www.livejournal.com/community/tenipuri_yaoi/541318.html

down near the bottom, in reply to my comment
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[identity profile] hakainokami.livejournal.com 2004-12-29 09:11 am (UTC)(link)
Wow. That was so.. in charecter and Everything. Nice.
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[identity profile] hakainokami.livejournal.com 2004-12-30 07:03 am (UTC)(link)
It really was, I am also surprised there hasn't been more of a response. I was very happpy when I saw that you had written one after it though.

[identity profile] ecchipiro.livejournal.com 2005-01-05 02:14 am (UTC)(link)
Wahh TezuOishi is my fav Tezuka-pair. I loved this. Smutty and hot. ^^v

Hope you got some more in stock.

[identity profile] simply-kim.livejournal.com 2005-01-06 02:26 pm (UTC)(link)
hrm... I kinda liked this. XD I'm not much of a Tezuka/Oishi fan, since I LOVE AtoZuka too much... but if ever Tezuka would deviate away from Atobe, this would be more like it. XD I haven't read Genius 250 yet, sadly, but I will, once I get all the stuff I need to do done. ^_^ Anyway, I like the fact that they share some sort of connection, you were pretty accurate about that (It shows in the way you presented your fic) However, I have to say that the part where Oishi-kun said "Fuck me..." or something along those lines blew my brain off. XD I couldn't even dare thing he would say that! XD But then, it's your fic and it's your prerogative on what to do with your characters... acter all, there WERE times that Oishi had been known to switch from mother hen to being quite demanding and authoritative at the same time. So, it's possible. I can't contest to that fact. ^_^
Techie stuff-wise, i'd say you did a great job in presenting it, the grammar is good, you made clear the setting and the atmosphere as well.

Great job! ^_^

[identity profile] simply-kim.livejournal.com 2005-01-07 12:23 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, I see. ^_^ Your work fascinates me, so I think I would be reading more of your pieces in the near future. ^_^

Yes, Oishi IS a rather fascinating character, as opposed to what many people say about him. I totally agree with you on that one. ^_^ And I'm really excited to read the newest chapter of the TeniPuri manga! ^_^ I'm sure I will enjoy it. ^_^