Saiunkoku: The Age of Silver: The Color of the Phoenix's Tail - Part Two

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

The Color of the Phoenix's Tail: Part Two

Shuuei and Kouyuu pass the Exams and meet the princes. Drama, I-3

"Why would you want to get rid of your best friend, the one who's always ready to help you out?" Shuuei asked, innocently. "Or help you back to where you were trying to go, anyway..."

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[grey-damaskena.livejournal.com]

I am utterly thrilled with the Seien and Ryuuki cuteness, because brotherly cuteness gets me every time.

With that out of the way, much fun with Kouyuu and Shuuei. I especially like your characterization of Shuuei, his easy manner and refusal to be serious. And really, needling Kouyuu is far, far too fun. It's only because he gets so riled up, after all . . .

A question regarding continuity: I take it that this five-parter is one storyline, and the various installments are not significantly separated by time? For instance, in part 2 now we're seeing Seien and Ryuuki out training, which they started in part 1? Just clarifying for my own peace of mind. :-)

w007, am looking forward to more!

[branchandroot]

*grins* Thank you!

Shuuei is a lot of fun, that way; he watches and calculates, and needles of course, so that it's kind of a shock those times when he actually gets serious. He even catches Seien that way before too long.

*sighs* Actually, These are meant to be separated by at least a handful of months each; I've been trying to figure out how to indicate that between parts one and two, and haven't come up with anything graceful yet. I considered having the brothers playing instead of sparring, but... now they're this old, sparring seems to /be/ their playing. *makes disgruntled sounds*

More coming! Shuurei is up next.

[grey-damaskena.livejournal.com]

Hm . . . if you need something to indicate the passage of time, you could try mentioning the weather or which plants are blooming in the gardens. That's a trick they use in anime a lot: any time you're watching some high school anime and there are cherry blossoms everywhere, you know it's the beginning of the school year . . .

Huzzah, looking forward to more!