PoT: Translated: Tarnished
Jun. 21st, 2006 02:14 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
Fic post from my archive.
Tezuka watches his newest warrior and wonders about him.
Kaga would be a good place to see Echizen's real mettle. Kunimitsu's mouth tightened.
Echizen's form was beautiful. Deadly.
And wrong.
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Date: 2006-06-21 06:30 pm (UTC)So Fuji isn't a general?
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Date: 2006-06-21 06:46 pm (UTC)No, he's not. *frowns* I actually don't know /what/ he is, yet. Just that he isn't a general. He might be a captain. Or he might not be an officer at all. I'm thinking it's probably the latter. Ryouma is going to end up in somewhat the same position, I think.
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Date: 2006-06-21 07:13 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-06-21 09:59 pm (UTC)Fuji and Tezuka were simply wonderful. *pleased*
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Date: 2006-06-21 10:15 pm (UTC)*grins* Eiji's fun, in this 'verse. Pretty ruthless, really. I don't know when we'll meet him 'face to face' as it were, but he does have a part coming up.
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Date: 2006-06-21 11:00 pm (UTC)Ii dataI wonder what Eiji would look like when he fights. It'd be pretty hard to do acrobatics in the samurai armour...but if he were a ninja then that's different... *suddenly imagines Eiji and Gakuto throwing shurinken and kunai at each other*
Okay...since Tezuka is Taisho...and Momo is Taii...I can imagine Fuji being Chusa. I think. With his skills and all. :x But it's your story do whatever you want! @_@;
Fudomine~ well they're Kaga now. Oh, I wonder how Tezuka will make Echizen really improve... :x
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Date: 2006-06-21 11:13 pm (UTC)Ah! Do you have any citations for ranks besides bu/Taishou and Taii, in this period? I couldn't find any other ranks in actual, attested use. And I'm /really/ hesitant to fill in the blanks with the military ranks that developed later.
*wry* And, I have to say, Tezuka is kind of wondering what he'll do with Echizen, too.
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Date: 2006-06-22 11:50 pm (UTC)For the ranks I went to wikipedia... http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Army_officer_rank
I compared the Japanese Imperial Army ranks to the United States army ranks...
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Date: 2006-06-23 12:10 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-06-22 12:36 am (UTC)ah, there you are Fuji.... [strictly refrains from purring]
No, I can't really see Fuji as an officer, either. It's not his style... that level of responsbility is not something he desires or needs. A strong leader, worthy of his respect and mind... that's something else.
Okay, fangirl begging here: please, please, please, please, please let there be some little itty bit of TezuFuji/FujiTezu in here... the intimacy of their friendship just screams for it. I think I'm just resigned to the fact that I'll probably always be a TezuFuji fangirl... even when I het-pair them.
Interesting that you set Inui as seeking Echizen out. I'd be interested in seeing his rational for that. Does he see watch Tezuka sees-- the deadly potential? or just the potential? In the series, it seemed like he saw the potential, but he underestimated it, underestimated Ryoma's lethalness. Inui fell into his own trap of self-confidence. Which, really, was understandable. After all, only Tezuka and Fuji had ever been able to defeat him without fail, right? And the others, he was always able to win within reasonable predicability, right?
And, yeah, have I mentioned how much I love the Tezuka-Fuji interaction?
Hmmm... now... let's see... if he's playing against Inui now, am I to assume he's already played against Kaidoh? Maybe that's what first drew Inui's attention to Ryoma. And next to follow is some Momo-Ryoma interaction... after the freshmen congratulating Ryoma, but... the freshman wouldn't know that Tezuka plans on including Ryoma in next month's advance, yet... which means, maybe some of that MomoRyo interaction.........
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Date: 2006-06-22 12:48 am (UTC)As for the TezuFuji... they are, in this 'verse, close enough that it could be interpreted that way. Even though I am totally standing by my threat to make Tezuka married and give Fuji a long-standing romance with a courtesan. *evil, evil smile* Wait till you find out who she is.
*hearts*
But yes! I think Inui did see the brightness, but underestimated Ryouma's deadliness. Hence his surprise during their bout, here. *pets Inui* Poor guy. Not used to the surprises. The matches I do hit, I'm trying to keep as close to the tennis version as I can, given the swords.
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Date: 2006-06-22 02:49 am (UTC)I read a webarticle once about how love has destroyed marriage. It was rather enlightening. I wonder if I saved the address somewhere....
As for the matches... just considering the setting of your story, I think it would be difficult to protray many of them. After all, in a battle, things can get pretty chaotic, ne? The matches would be overlapping and interferring with each other as opponents battle and defend and attack... The ichinen trio, for example... half the time they won't even be on the battle field, right? so all their fanboying would be done before and after the fact... Oh, the drunken celebratory after-parties.... [grins and tries to imagine Ryoma and sake]
Will you be bringing more of Nanjiroh into the story, too? That would be interesting... do the others already know of Nanjiroh's fame and then surprising disappearance? Do they talk about him in legends...only to be confronted with the debauchery of the truth? [glints] hmmm... don't think that last sentence came out right. blah. tired and want to sleep. oh well. [sighs]
Okay, I'll let you get back to writing.
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Date: 2006-06-22 03:21 am (UTC)*sparkles* You read my mind, though! Ichinen and sake and Echizen /will/ be happening!
*considers* I think Nanjirou will be the constantly present absence. It's his shadow that will always be in the stories. Both of his legendary skill and his debauchery *wry*
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Date: 2006-06-22 03:34 am (UTC)Sanada's just distant. It would take a strong personality to pull him out of his distancing, and, I don't know. I just don't think there would be many good Japanese girls of the time who would really care to try. Let him go, fight his battles, stay away for days and months on end. And when he returns, fine. She'll make sure his robes are cleaned, that his bath is drawn and meals are served. If he demands it of her, she'll spread her legs and give him release. And if not, then that's all the better. She has better things she'd rather do with her time.
Tezuka's wife... I still maintain that he and Ryuzaki's daughter would make a good couple. That kind of sweet and kind, caring young woman who wants desperately to gain his pleasing. And Tezuka isn't as difficult to draw in, either.
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Date: 2006-06-22 03:35 am (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2006-06-26 05:20 pm (UTC)I like how the snippets are all so dignified and quiet and water colour-y.
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Date: 2006-06-26 06:31 pm (UTC)*beams* Thank you.
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Date: 2006-06-27 12:28 pm (UTC)♥
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