PoT: Translated: Unnoticed

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Unnoticed

Echizen escorts Sakuno and deals with a little trouble. Other sorts of trouble, he misses completely. Drama, I-3

Or, she admitted to herself with a silent sigh, maybe he hadn't done it for her at all. He was a samurai, after all; she was young, but she knew how the men of her own class could be about fights and challenges.

Comments

[written-in-blue.livejournal.com]

You know, that encounter is so much more satisfying with swords. Which probably says something about me...

*pets Sakuno*

[branchandroot]

*evil laugh* Yeah, it really is. Comeuppance with sharp edges. *pleased sigh*

[femme-cat.livejournal.com]

I wonder who it is Sumire-gozen is complaining about. I can't wait to see the others. X3

[branchandroot]

*evil grin* I expect she complains about all the officers. I'm really hoping I can find room for a story that features her directly. More action and characters introduced in the next part, though, yes!

[meitachi.livejournal.com]

Swords! Pretty much what lysapadin said. Heh.

[branchandroot]

^___^ The swords really do make the whole thing the much more fun to play with.

[hazuki-katako.livejournal.com]

*also pets Sakuno* Ganbatte Sakuno-hime! ;_;

Echizen-dono flicked his sword away from Sakuno with a snap of his wrist and sheathed it, and turned to look Sakuno up and down. "You didn't get dirty. Good. Let's get to the shrine, then."

I really like this line...he got a little worried about her but I guess if Sakuno got dirty Ryoma would get in trouble. ^^;

[branchandroot]

Thank you! *pets the Ryouma-muse* He's still pretty darn oblivious, poor boy, but he's got a good heart. And Sakuno's got determination. *grins*

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

.... what does it say about me that I got giddy when I realized they're "playing" with real swords? >.>

What's worse was my realization that Fuji would have a blade, too... yeah. There just aren't enough cold showers. !__!




And... I have to say: This scene was just so damn more satisfying with blades!!!!

[branchandroot]

*grins* Isn't it so much more nice to see the villains get whacked with a sharp edge?

And yes! I think I may have to do the match in the rain, and probably its aftermath... though, as usual, it's the matches themselves that are hardest to write. ^_^;

[forochel.livejournal.com]

And I'm all just "XD" at Sakuno and Ryoma's obliviousness and how Sasabe got so owned by Ryoma. Of course, action sharp pointy objects made me reeeaally happy too. It's so much more, um, gratifying, somehow, with swords.

[branchandroot]

*grins* It really is just a huge amount of fun to be able to stick it to Sasabe with a real point.

[forochel.livejournal.com]

BLOOD WAS DRAWN. BWAHAHAHAHAAAAH.


Um.

[fromastudio]

What everyone else said - this scene just seems to fit perfectly with swords. This is probably my favourite of the set so far - just because it has Ryoma and Sakuno (and Sasabe) all being perfectly themselves. Plus blood and sharp pointy objects.

"Echizen-dono... thank you," Sakuno murmured at last, blushing.

Echizen-dono blinked at her. "For what?"

Ahhh, young love. *pours imaginary hearts on oblivious Ryoma*

[branchandroot]

*laughing* Really, it's cute how clueless Ryouma is. Sakuno has so much more of an emotional clue. Now, if they can just manage to trade--some of her clue for some of his spine.

It's so /satisfying/ to actually have Sasabe get slice up; I'm probably too vindictive. Oh well.