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Cross-post from my archive.

Fandom/Arc: Avalanche, Naruto
Characters/Pairings: Chiyo, Haruno Sakura, Hatake Kakashi, Hyuuga Neji, Kankurou, Maito Gai, Rock Lee, Temari, Tenten, Tsunade, Uchiha Sasuke, Uzumaki Naruto
Summary: In which Gaara is taken by Akatsuki and Kakashi's and Gai's teams are sent to aid Hidden Sand to get him back.
Meta: Drama, Action, Fluff, I-4
Wordcount: 6494

Sasuke gave up on logic, as he so often had to around Naruto and just shook him. "Shut up and listen to me," he said, low and deadly. "I am not letting you run yourself right into ambush. Understand? Not by those bastards and not because you were too unbelievably bullheaded to Stay. With. Your team!" Three more hard shakes punctuated that, and Naruto finally blinked at Sasuke like he knew who was in front of him.

Read: It's Just That Any One of Us Is Half Without Another One Is You - Chapter Ten

Date: 2011-09-30 04:30 pm (UTC)
edenfalling: stylized black-and-white line art of a sunset over water (Default)
From: [personal profile] edenfalling
Aaaah, tension! *bites nails*

I love all the practical realism you're bringing to a story about, essentially, magical reality-warping ninjas. :-) Like the kids sharing intelligence and picking Kakashi as the person to bring their thoughts to higher authorities. Or the way both Sasuke and Naruto occasionally need someone to yank them back to rationality... and they get that support, because their teammates know their triggers and are ready to provide it. Or Hidden Sand very sensibly sending trackers and a retrieval team of their own after Gaara (which, yeah, seriously, why didn't that happen in the manga?). Chiyo explaining about the extraction procedure, because of course that's how Sand gets Shukaku into the... whatever it is they keep him in. (I want to say a teapot, but that sounds ridiculous. My memory, it is a sieve.)

I can't wait for the cliffhanger to resolve next week.

Date: 2011-09-30 11:46 pm (UTC)
edenfalling: stylized black-and-white line art of a sunset over water (Default)
From: [personal profile] edenfalling
Keeping evil entities in household items always sounds dicey to me. I mean, what if someone accidentally tries to brew tea with the demon-in-kettle? Will they pour the evil out along with the water and release havoc among everyone who drinks the resulting tea? Or what if someone uses the evil genie's lamp as, you know, a lamp? Does it produce evil smoke?

But then again, this is folklore; it doesn't have to make sense. *grin*

Date: 2011-10-01 12:51 am (UTC)
edenfalling: stylized black-and-white line art of a sunset over water (Default)
From: [personal profile] edenfalling
Perhaps that's a way to make a tanuki reveal himself? Of course, then you have an angry, scorched tanuki in your kitchen...

Date: 2011-10-01 03:38 am (UTC)
jennaria: Soubi from Loveless, with his hair back, wearing glasses (sexy librarian)
From: [personal profile] jennaria
I think I remember reading a Japanese folktale once, wherein a monk came across what he thought was just a tea-kettle - and when he put it on the fire, it promptly jumped off and hopped around, screaming, "Ow, hot!" I don't remember the tanuki doing anything bad to the monk, though, just mutual surprise.

(And one more vote for you being a cruel fic-tease, in case you wondered.)

Date: 2011-09-30 08:56 pm (UTC)
inoru_no_hoshi: The most ridiculous chandelier ever: shaped like a penis. Text: Sparklepeen. (Default)
From: [personal profile] inoru_no_hoshi
And we have to wait til next Friday for more? Truly you have mastered the art of cliffhanging. :O

Typo: [...]Naruto’s beside manner [...]. :)

Date: 2011-10-01 12:15 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] annotated_em
*chews nails* Ack, cliffhanger, ack ack ack!

Although how much do I love Sasuke thwapping Naruto back into common sense, and the team snuggling, and Kakashi being freaked out by Tsunade's thoughtful looks?

Date: 2011-10-02 01:32 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] theodosia21
You're ending there? Argh, is it Friday yet? *laughs*

Another great chapter! I love the inter-team bonding at the beginning, and the reasonable explanation of why their cohort is definitely not the norm, and Sasuke telling Naruto not to run off without backup, and Naruto healing. Also, where you chose to end the chapter is definitely evil. ^_^

Date: 2011-10-07 02:33 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] hokuton_punch
GAARA GAARA GAARA GAARA GAARA ;o; ALL MY WORRY GAARA BE OKAY PLEASE

Date: 2011-10-14 12:15 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] mitsuhachi
I love how you've got Sakura playing with Shikamaru. In a universe where she's allowed to be as smart as she is, I could see the two of them having the /weirdest/ friendship, in that way where sometimes you don't even care who the other is as a person because you're so happy to have someone you can talk to on your own level. I love Ino and Naruto sparring, and Sasuke pretending pretty badly that he's not totally going "MINE *HISS*" at the mention of people trying to take Naruto, and Mastermind!Sakura--have I mentioned recently that the way you write sakura kind of makes me flail with glee.

Almost immediately, as he’d half expected, he had a teammate snuggled up on either side. D'awwww, team seven. D'aww. <3

And Fuunotora is back! \o/ Most awesome OC. And Lee getting to be awesome.

Also, out of curiousity, is this in the same universe as you BB fic? Cause your Neji. Mmm.

Date: 2011-10-14 09:18 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] mitsuhachi
Quickly, because you made me lol so hard. <3 Now back to the stuff I was actually supposed to be drawing. >.>

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