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Challenge: Chapter Three

Stress in school gives Niou the break in the game he's been looking for. Drama, I-4

Yagyuu was eyeing him like a tiger trying to decide whether some sharp-clawed creature would be more trouble than lunch was worth. Masaharu gave him a brilliant, wolverine's smile, and he snorted.

Date: 2004-06-16 07:45 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] written-in-blue.livejournal.com
SQUEE! will comment more after work.

Date: 2004-06-16 11:11 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] written-in-blue.livejournal.com
I wonder if Niou has any idea at this point how very affectionate he sounds? Probably not; I sense a smacking by the wet trout of get-a-clue is in his future. [purrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrs]

Also, I feel vaguely sorry for any poor fool who gets in this boy's way.

Date: 2004-06-17 12:22 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] written-in-blue.livejournal.com
Ah. Yukimura in the library armed with the clue-trout. Makes perfect sense.

Date: 2004-06-16 08:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] arete.livejournal.com
You know I still haven't watched the anime or read the manga? I'm regretting this more and more as you're outputting some of the most wonderful psychological fanfic that I've seen in a long time. Damn it, I'm definitely going to have to make time for the anime/manga...

Date: 2004-06-16 08:31 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] anruik
I'm starting to find myself putting a lot of these fics in my memories. *chuckles* Definitely getting attached.

Date: 2004-06-16 08:51 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] anruik
Reading your commentary about how Niou'll rip anyone apart to keep his happy-shiny after reading these made me cackle. XD

MORE FIC!!!

Date: 2004-06-17 05:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] readx0r.livejournal.com
EEEEEE! And I know NOTHING about Rikkai, BUT! I am now completely in love with Niou. And Yukimura. And Yagyuu. *is usually a total Houytei fangirl* XD But especially Niou, because I love intelligent, subtle, manipulative characters. <33333333

Date: 2004-06-17 01:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lady-readwolf.livejournal.com
{frustrated, tortured, fangirly scream} AH! (okay, imaged long and drawn out, with some floor writhing and all that goodness)

where the !$#^!@)#$%^!@)$O*%&!$!!!!! is the rest????

need.... more....

{rocking in post-nervous fit} need...more...need more....


[blinks] and dammit--did *EVERYONE* have a sadistical math teacher at some point in their lives? {scratches head, very glad she's an English teacher and not a math or science monster-er, teacher}

Date: 2004-06-17 09:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lady-readwolf.livejournal.com
{processes}

chunks = more bits sooner rather than later

chunks = smaller servings, sooner rather than larger servings later

......

{sighs} It's torturous either way you look at it, really, but I'll take what I can get as soon as I can get it....

And, albeit *some* English teachers can be... sadistical... {grins} we all have our days, ne?

Date: 2004-06-17 01:42 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] soloproject.livejournal.com
*claps furiously*

Yagyuu's head lifted, slowly, to look at him straight on. "Lack of control is your forte, Niou-kun, not mine," he said, dead level.

Yeah and just watch Yagyuu roar!!! @______@ Niou is so...testing Yagyuu. There's a reason why Yagyuu would be a deadly seme. *nods hard*

"Let you what is the question," Yagyuu noted, but amusement flickered in those clear, cutting eyes. "It could be interesting, I suppose."

Hahaha, oh what? WHAT?! @___@

And Niou is so sweet. I wonder if he knows what he's doing!? I love his extremely mild provoking, oh Niou-baby you turn bring the gentleman around. ^_^

*sighs* I'm so down in the dumps lately actually. Such great fic is a welcome distraction, so thank you. This is continuing eh? Maybe you could write some Jackal fic sometime too?

Date: 2004-06-18 09:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] beckymarie.livejournal.com
Augh. I don't even know where to START. Just... massive squee'ing over here, really. A lot of times when authors make up backgrounds for the characters, they don't always quite click with me, but I could just SEE younger!Yagyuu showing that he knew more about math (and SQUEE to the idea of him being a math geek, LOVE LOVE LOVE) than the teacher and the trouble that gave him for the rest of the year (the other students avoiding him especially clicked with me) and that affecting the way he is now.

Niou's poking at him was brilliantly done (and I have to grin any time he thinks someone "really had it coming" XD), the way Yagyuu never avoids his challenge and that only makes it all the sweeter--it's something like that that really makes them WORK as a doubles pair and you can see why they're the Doubles 1 of such a strong team. Marui's comments about how they were lucky to have cliked the way they did, the way doubles syndrome was present in them like all good doubles pairing was VERY nicely worked in there.

And Yagyuu's snapping was beautifully done, I love that boy here so, so much. *__* The sharp, laser-like (if I can borrow a cliche metaphor) of Yagyuu's eyes came across perfectly, I could just SEE that intense look on his face and feel the tension vibrating in the air between them. That Niou was further incited by seeing the more intense/fiery sides of people really FITS here (....I'm going to be abusing versions of "OMG, this FITS!" a lot, I suspect. >_>) and Yagyuu pinning him to the floor was *___*-inducing.

But I also adored the way they both calmed back down, the way you brought out all these reactions with... well, without resorting to overblown dramatics, is the best way to say it, I guess? They're not chaotic people who lend themselves easily to hysterics and dramatics, but I believed that Yagyuu would lose his cool this way, with those carefully chosen words of Niou's--which WERE just fantastically written. Not to mention the undercurrent of affection ringing through Niou's tone and the stirrings of it we can see in Yagyuu, just by being as open with Niou as he has been. The mentions of the various levels of smiles or the way amusement flickers in his eyes... just... SQUEE. ♥ XD;;

Sadistic teachers...

Date: 2009-03-12 08:02 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yamipenguin.livejournal.com
Well no-I never really had any problems with my teachers. Mainly because I did my best to stay out of trouble...As for Yagyuu-did he ever get his revenge on the teacher? Somehow I can see Niou tracking down the teacher down and getting major payback...He would definitely do it!

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