PoT: Standalone: Challenge - Chapter Two

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Challenge: Chapter Two

Niou and Yagyuu become a doubles pair, and the game continues. Drama, I-3

Masaharu opened his mouth to ask a pointed question about why it was Yukimura making all these decisions and announcing them, and not the captain standing, silent and uncomfortable, behind the Trinity. He closed it again, with a smooth look, at Sanada's burning glare.

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[written-in-blue.livejournal.com]

So much to love about this part! [squeals quietly] Right, then. Yukimura? I think I'm falling just a tiny bit in love with him--the protectiveness! The courtesy! The brute squad--er, I mean, Sanada! The way he handled the faculty advisor! [fangirls]

Also, the voice you've given Niou amuses the fuck out of me, especially his nicknames for the trio. [grins]

(all praise the goodness that is Yukimura)

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

~~~The fourth of their little party, Marui, preened amusingly about that.~~~

Yeah! Bunta!!! {glomps}

~~~They didn't get really slaughtered until the Munificent Three decided to get in on the action.~~~

Auh, poor babies. {snickers}.


~~~Honestly, he was starting to wonder why they hadn't just made Yukimura captain this year and had done with it.~~~

gods! I loved this entire section (what's this about Bunta being a genius, eh? The whole return hitting the net thing, is it?)--especially the Yukimaru bits (yes, I'm a crazy Yuki fan. ~_~ one of many, I'm sure... pretty pretty boy... pretty pretty voice...)


~~~Yukimura's eyes narrowed and glinted, the smile fading as his mouth hardened.... the husky voice was chill and precise as a surgical scalpel... Yukimura was being perfectly courteous... except that he was definitely giving orders. And whatever resistance the advisor might have been able to muster in face of that cold, diamond sharp surety folded when Sanada stepped to Yukimura's shoulder and added his own, much less subtle, threat to Yukimura's.~~~

{squeals with fangirlish delight} gods damn! I *love* this boy! I do, I do! {panting in a puddle of fangirl goo}

~~~Yagyuu, the Perfect Gentleman, the apple of the administrative eye, had a problem with authority.~~~

{eyes sparkle} ooooooh..... {evil little happy wolfish grin}

~~~Now, now Masaharu thought he had the key.~~~

{blinks} ACK! These parts are way too short! No time to stop and reflect; must read part three. NOW!!!

[soloproject.livejournal.com]

OMG, I'm so sorry. Andrea's comments always make me "ooh"! Just as much as this fic does.

First off, I would like to say as Muse Police I am so proud that they are behaving properly.

Second, Yukimura = POWER TO THE PEOPLE!!!!!!!!!!!! The characterization of our little girl is so wonderful. The natural leadership and the polite evil so befits him it's so easy to believe why he would be buchou and not Sandork.

Niou is so cute, very different from the way he is normally portrayed in but still so appropriate. He is so being tortured by Yagyuu there and the "Sensei" probably knows it too.

Enjoyinh this IMMENSELY!! Now off to the third!

[beckymarie.livejournal.com]

I really, really like the way you're building the sense of a team here (especially since it's not the Rikkai we see now, but very much how they must have been a year or two back), but without letting go of the Yagyuu/Niou dynamic, either. ♥ Niou's observation skills make a wonderful sort of sense--not a data specialist like Yanagi, but observant enough that he can be a trickster--you have much more success at playing tricks on people (or impersonating them--and I've loved the references to that copying, but without making a Big Huge Deal about them) if you're a people-watcher and understand how they move/react.

Your Niou is hitting all the right buttons for me, but I'm also massively in love with your Yukimura and the way Sanada quietly but with such a strong presence behind him, supports Yukimura. ♥ ♥

[provetheworst.livejournal.com]

...I love your Yukimura ♥ Just saying that. <-- reading through the whole thing now, more comments later~