PoT: Standalone: Challenge - Chapter One

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Challenge: Chapter One

Niou enters junior high and encounters a wonderful new game. Drama, I-3

Niou Masaharu liked seeing people disconcerted. The expression itself amused him, and the knowledge that he had been the one to put it on somebody's face gave him a nice, warm glow of accomplishment.

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re: part 1

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

~~The real heart of it was understanding; the trick was simply the proof that he had understood correctly. And, of course, stirring people up made for even more opportunities to observe and understand.~~~

Oooh.. what *great* character analysis! Okay, now back to the fun stuff...


~~~Yagyuu Hiroshi was not easy to understand. Nor was he easy to unsettle.
Masaharu thought he just might be in love.~~~

Uh-oh.... {grinning madly} Hmmm... this could be... trouble...


~~~It was times like this that he wished Yukimura wasn't so damn easy-going most of the time. .... but Masaharu figured that was probably half the point--Yukimura could harness Sanada's temper.~~~

{howling with laughter} yes! Yes! I can *so* see this! Ha ha!


~~~Santa must think he'd been a very good boy; his Christmas present was here four whole months early.~~~

I think this is the beginning of a .... dammit! Where's the sex already!?!? {clears throat} err... I mean... yeah... ^.^;;;


~~~"Ever the gentleman," Masaharu laughed, moving up.~~~

HEELLOOOOOOOO, 'gentleman'! ^.^;; It's like Niou gave him his nickname! How sweet! Will Yagyuu return the favor, I wonder? Hmmm....

~~~Facing Yagyuu across the net he had noticed the intensity of Yagyuu's game, the flare of focus and passion pressed under the smooth glass of Yagyuu's manners and restraint. Playing on the same side as him was like standing next to a lightning strike. A charged, ringing atmosphere enfolded him. He could feel Yagyuu's presence in it, like a weight.~~~

{shivers} omg.... if that isn't a set up for an orgasmic experience....

Let me say, right here, right now---THANK YOU for posting all three parts, 'cause if I had to wait to get my hands on the next part...{shakes head} I would *not* have been responsible for my actions...


Now--post reading thoughts/reflections

Oh, this is gonna be a damn, good story! ^.^ Yeah! Rikkai-love! Oooh, and you included Jackal! Tee hee hee! Will our favorite redhead be making an appearance, too? (ever notice how the redheads of each team are more likely to be doubles players? I wonder what that means...)

And, omgs! {laughs} he kept the book of postcards, eh? Wonder what he did with 'em... {grins} Oh! And Yukimura/Sanada love! the mama and papa of the Rikkai family! gotta love 'em! I just absolutly adored how you described Yuki's possible reaction to any prank of Niou's. I also like how you use Niou's first name, too... need to get more familiar with that myself. ^.^;;

Okay, okay, that's enough, 'cause I wanna get onto the second part already! geesh! I can't believe I made myself wait all day to read this! {thinks} well, it's probably a good thing I didn't try reading this at work....

Re: part 1

[branchandroot]

Yes, yes, the sex is coming, it'll just be a while. *grins wickedly* And the postcards will make a reappearance. *snickers*

Re: part 1

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

{grumbles something about sadistic authors who make people wait and then laugh at their misery}