YnM: Sky Diving: Polarization - Part Three

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Polarization: Part Three

Watari finally succeeds in becoming a woman, and Tatsumi finally finds out why he wanted to so badly. And why Enma is so upset about it. Drama with Romance and Porn, I-4

He suspected he'd get a lot worse than a docked paycheck if he was found out, but the tightness around Watari's eyes and the tension of her mouth were more than he could ignore. He liked most of his co-workers, even when they were being idiots or breaking expensive things, but Watari...

Watari was the only one who laughed at him.

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[branchandroot]

*hearts* Lovely feedback all around, thank you!

*considers* Tatsumi is hard to work with that way, because he keeps his emotions very much to himself--reticent even in his own head. I think he agreed partly because Watari was so serious and so desperate, he figures this must be important, and perhaps I'll lean on that harder in the first part. *pokes part two* There may also be room for Watari to intuit more of Tatsumi's feelings and motivations, though his own urgencies are distracting him pretty heavily there. It's true I don't want to push it too far, though; they haven't really gotten to the place most of my characters are by the time it comes to porn. They've only started getting there. Hm. Maybe I'll see about making /that/ more evident.

Thank you again! *grins* This was, indeed, very satisfying to write, and Watari is just the most fun muse ever.

[cutter-tekka.livejournal.com]

You're welcome as always. ^^

I can certainly see where you're coming from with Tatsumi being "reticent in his own head," now that you mention it. And I also may get part of my deliberation thing from the fact that he can clearly and coherently explain NOW why he had to leave Tsuzuki THEN--but that doesn't mean his reasoning processes weren't very quiet at the time...maybe like a computer in which the emotional processes are running in the background? And the company budget is the program that's running in the front. [laughs]

[branchandroot]

*laughing* Excellent metaphor for him!

I also tend to think that Tatsumi isn't very good at dealing with raw emotion, witness the way he just couldn't handle Tsuzuki or, before that, his mother. That may be part of why I picture him as 'courtly' when he's with a partner, and why he really wants Watari to relax from that manic multitasking edge that's so very Watari.

*rumples hair* Now how do I get that into the narrative... Hmmm.

[cutter-tekka.livejournal.com]

Oh, Tatsumi would so totally be "courtly." ^^ Yes, raw emotion + Tatsumi = failure. I'm not sure why I didn't integrate that knowledge more into my reading experience, either. But that must be why Watari makes so much sense as a partner for Tatsumi, since Watari's got a very good handle on his emotionality (unlike the rest of the office) and isn't threatening in that way.

Okay, I'm stopping now; it's just an interesting train of thought. ^^