PoT: Mirror Writing: Backstage - Part One

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Backstage: Part One

Tezuka and Atobe meet while out fishing, in the Spring of their third year of high school. Conversation, verbal jousting, poetry, philosophy, angst, dramatics and humor ensue. Drama with Budding Romance, I-3

Keigo took a few deep breaths; he would not, he told himself strenuously, scream with frustration. No matter how cathartic it might be just now. He had an image to maintain, even if Tezuka didn't usually believe it.

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[branchandroot]

*basks in the accolade of evilness*

Grammar is a toy; play is good! I rather like the second way you constructed it. With only two list items, actually, it's fairly acceptable to leave out the comma. And I definitely like the break in the verb phrase. That's an Atobe way to phrase it.