PoT: Standalone: Challenge - Chapter Ten

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Challenge: Chapter Ten

The team brings the results to their captain. Drama, I-3

"Is it over, do you think?" Yagyuu asked, at last, barely whispering in the silence. He didn't protest when Masaharu twined a hand into his hair, drawing his head down to Masaharu's shoulder.

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[soloproject.livejournal.com]

*sobs*

I hate you. You made me cry in public! *glares at people in net cafe*

It's...*scrolls up and down* over? Awww...man, no! but it was lovely of course and I will pimp your fic until the day I die.

"Enough, Akaya," he said, more gently. "You drove yourself well past your limits, all the way to collapse. There was no more you could have done. And if this had never come to you," he paused, seeming to search for words, "your game would never have become real. Honorable losses are simply an invitation to win next time."

The most beautiful line in the whole entire story. It sums up everything, just zips it up into place. And Sanada! *shockers* I'm feeling very affectionate with him right now but it is in his characterization and I could not ask for more. Akaya is freaky adorable this time and Yukimura! Oh how they love him and we do too.

Niou and Yagyuu have been great, just *squish* and wonderful witnesses to the whole thing. I wonder though, you refer to Niou as Masaharu but Yagyuu is never Hiroshi? Or am I missing something?

Thank you, thank you, thank you for this little gem! ♥ ♥ ♥ I'm going to print every bit of it and just read the whole thing over and over and over.

[branchandroot]

Awww *snuggles* didn't mean to. *bats eyelashes*

Names, yeah. Thing is, I usually write in intimate third person, so what gets narrated is my pov character's thoughts. Most people think of themselves by their given names (ergo, Masaharu), but it didn't quite seem that Niou would think of his partner as Hiroshi yet.

But you're welcome, you're welcome, you're welcome! *heartsback* There will be more in the same arc, following quite shortly.

[soloproject.livejournal.com]

Teeny voice, while twiddling fingers: Or YanaKiri, lol! XD

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

or anyone, really---just, um, *please* write more Rikkai 'cause this was.... {words fail to describe}

{sighs happily-sad-like} Don't wanna believe it's over. But I guess we just have to wait for more, ne?


Hey, in the anime did they *show* Rikkai dai confronting Yukimura with the news of their loss? I know the manga's not there yet, but... Well, I haven't seen much Rikkai in recent episodes except for Sanada and Kirihara (and isn't it weird that the others didn't make an appearance? Why is Seigaku's team the only complete team? And Hyotei's *almost* complete---though I *still* don't understand why Gakuto's not there), so, I guess there's still a *lot* of open air surrounding Rikkai right now... {pouts}

Still... you did a remarkable job at keeping this story in Masaharu's point of view, and I'm looking forward to the point when Yagyuu becomes Hiroshi, and, hey! {only-semi-teasingly} maybe even that foursome between the doubles players, ne?

[branchandroot]

More coming!

*wails* No, they didn't show anything in the anime! I was so distressed. I'm hoping they'll weave it back in, as Konomi makes up his mind how he wants to play it. *pouts too*

So, let's see! *looks at bunnies* UST and smut, today, I think. That balances nicely, doesn't it? *sweet smile*

[lady-readwolf.livejournal.com]

{stretches lazily} hmmm... some down right smut *does* sound good.... I guess I should get back to editing "OZ" {pouts} I've been enjoying my break off from having to write my own darn fics.

{smacks lips} Okay! Already having your pairings picked out? Already have the fic written, perchance? ^_______^