DVD Commentary Meme

[branchandroot]

Oh, what the heck. I need to be distracted from pre-term nerves.

Pick any passage of 500 words or less from any story I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you the equivalent of a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you’d expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

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[anehan]

Had to choose between Fortune and Resolution. The latter won. So, have some porn! ^_^

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“I should teach you a lesson about teasing, Akaya,” Sanada-san said in his ear, voice deep and rich with amusement and intimacy. “But somehow I doubt it would keep you from playing with fire.”

“Sanada-san,” Akaya breathed, without the coherence to answer further. Sanada-san kissed him, hard.

He was grateful when Sanada-san let him down onto the bed, because he wasn’t sure how long he would stay standing without Sanada-san holding him up. Once he was lying down he could let himself twist and arch into the stroke of Sanada-san’s hands over his stomach, down his legs, without worrying about little things like falling down. He felt like his body had turned to some kind of liquid, waves echoing out from every point of contact.

Sanada-san wrapped Akaya in his arms and rolled over, pulling Akaya to lie on top of him. Akaya blinked down, and then sucked in his breath as Sanada-san’s hands ran down his thighs, spreading his legs wide. He felt Sanada-san bring his own legs up to keep Akaya’s open, and heat touched his cheeks. Sanada-san smiled at him, slight and promising, before he wound a hand into Akaya’s hair and drew him down to a slow kiss. He felt Sanada-san shift under him, heard a faint clatter, and then felt Sanada-san’s other hand, slick and cool, press between his cheeks. He made a startled sound into Sanada-san’s mouth, but that hand didn’t go any further yet, only rubbed against him, massaging.

The touch was gentle and hard, careful and forceful; it was entirely Sanada-san’s touch. Akaya dropped his head down to the curve of Sanada-san’s shoulder, feeling the sliding press of Sanada-san’s hand persuading his muscles to relax and open, feeling his legs splayed apart, lax, feeling both exposed and wantonly pleased by his position. Feeling, at last, two of Sanada-san’s fingers press smoothly into him, and he gasped sharply against Sanada-san’s neck.

“You let me in easily,” Sanada-san murmured to him. “Maybe I will show you what it’s like rough, after all. Another time.”

[branchandroot]

"Resolution", of course is the start of my first answer to the question, "how do we reconcile someone who acts as kittenish with his senpai as Kirihara does with the brief but sharp moments of violence shown between him and Sanada?". At this point, my answer was essentially that both of them were a little crazy with worry and blowing off steam with violence, and egging each other on, but that their base relationship was a pretty trusting one. Once the worry is over and the violence defused, where does that leave them? Sanada, since I was hybridizing the manga and anime, gets to be more of a worrier in general, whereas Kirihara is the direct-action type; so it's Kirihara who comes up with the answer "defuse the tension by finally having sex!". That puts Sanada just a little off his stride, and he's not actually the type to accept that for long, which leads us to this point.

“I should teach you a lesson about teasing, Akaya,” Sanada-san said in his ear, voice deep and rich with amusement and intimacy. “But somehow I doubt it would keep you from playing with fire.”

Okay, this is pure seiyuu porn, really, because... well, Kusunoki Taiten. Voice. Yeah. Beyond that, though, this is Sanada drawing back the upper hand.

“Sanada-san,” Akaya breathed, without the coherence to answer further. Sanada-san kissed him, hard.

And Kirihara letting him, because I'm thoroughly convinced that Kirihara is actually very wedded to senpai-kouhai propriety. He speaks very properly and, acts rather kittenish even with his elders in other schools (see the issue where he falls asleep on the bus and winds up at Seigaku, and how he approaches Tezuka).

He was grateful when Sanada-san let him down onto the bed, because he wasn’t sure how long he would stay standing without Sanada-san holding him up. Once he was lying down he could let himself twist and arch into the stroke of Sanada-san’s hands over his stomach, down his legs, without worrying about little things like falling down. He felt like his body had turned to some kind of liquid, waves echoing out from every point of contact.

I also tend to write Kirihara as very physical and sensual. I don't think he bothers with forethought, a lot, and if you consider his red-eye mode, that's never a deliberate thing; rather, he lets his opponent drive him to a place where he feels enough despair to trigger the violent overdrive response in himself. He's manipulating his own triggers, but he's not pulling them himself. So I wrote him as extremely responsive in all ways, including the physical.

Sanada-san wrapped Akaya in his arms and rolled over, pulling Akaya to lie on top of him. Akaya blinked down, and then sucked in his breath as Sanada-san’s hands ran down his thighs, spreading his legs wide. He felt Sanada-san bring his own legs up to keep Akaya’s open, and heat touched his cheeks. Sanada-san smiled at him, slight and promising, before he wound a hand into Akaya’s hair and drew him down to a slow kiss. He felt Sanada-san shift under him, heard a faint clatter, and then felt Sanada-san’s other hand, slick and cool, press between his cheeks. He made a startled sound into Sanada-san’s mouth, but that hand didn’t go any further yet, only rubbed against him, massaging.

The point here was to show that Sanada, even when he's got his dominant side running, is a careful person, and a careful lover. He knows this is all new to Kirihara, so he's being careful to guide him to a position that will help him relax. I think he also knows perfectly well how much Kirihara relies on his senpai for guidance in general, and is showing this much forcefulness exactly to get Kirihara to relax. This version of Sanada definitely came out as a care-taker.

The touch was gentle and hard, careful and forceful; it was entirely Sanada-san’s touch. Akaya dropped his head down to the curve of Sanada-san’s shoulder, feeling the sliding press of Sanada-san’s hand persuading his muscles to relax and open, feeling his legs splayed apart, lax, feeling both exposed and wantonly pleased by his position. Feeling, at last, two of Sanada-san’s fingers press smoothly into him, and he gasped sharply against Sanada-san’s neck.

But, of course, care-taking isn't all there is to him. Sanada is certainly capable of forethought and strategy, but he's also the "power through" type. And this Kirihara really likes that, likes being a little overpowered, definitely likes being taken care of. It's one of the greatest tensions of his personality, as I see it, that he's so determined to win against his senpai (and so terrified that he can't by any fair means), and at the same time so invested in this dynamic of care-taking and obedience.

“You let me in easily,” Sanada-san murmured to him. “Maybe I will show you what it’s like rough, after all. Another time.”

And Sanada knows, on some level, exactly how Kirihara responds. I don't think it's entirely conscious, not yet, at least in this storyline. But he knows just what to say to really make Kirihara hot. I also theorize that he really enjoys how Kirihara responds, and that it feeds his own sense of what is proper in an arc where he's also engaging in a very deep relationship with Yukimura and Yanagi that moves outside the usual channels of sex and romance. In a lot of ways, I think Kirihara is his security sex-blanket, in this arc.