PoT: Standalone: Challenge - Chapter Four

[branchandroot]

Fic post from my archive.

Challenge: Chapter Four

Niou and Yagyuu settle into their partnership. Drama, I-3

"You do realize," Masaharu murmured, "that you can be polite while still smashing them into jelly."

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[branchandroot]

*sparkles* Thank you!

*thoughtful* I think it's Niou, actually. The way his character shaped up, for me, was so complex--gritty and bouncy and intellectual and almost innocent all at the same time. And since he's pov, it affected the style. I like the voice that emerged between he and I.

(...Trying to capture the different levels of politeness in English is really hard, isn't it? x__X)

*groans* Is it ever! And I do *cough* admit to a certain tendency to get high-flown if I don't watch it. *sprinkles Purple-B-Gone on her prose* Something to keep an eye on when I do final revisions!